Imagine that you are doing a project on what teenagers do in their free time. You have collected some data on the subject (see the diagram below).

Comment on the data in the diagram and give your personal opinion on

the subject of the project.

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Essay 2024 Sample 01

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Comment on the following statement:

PROJECT ON WHAT TEENAGERS DO IN THEIR FREE TIME (2024)

What is your opinion? Do you agree with this statement?
Write 200-250 words.
Use the following plan:
—   make an opening statement on the subject of the project work;
—   select and report 2–3 main features;
—   make 1–2 comparisons where relevant;
—   outline a problem that can arise with the insufficient physical activity in adolescents and suggest the way of solving it;
—   draw a conclusion giving your personal opinion on the role of sport in the life of teenagers.

 

 

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Undoubtedly, leisure time is becoming more and more popular nowadays. I am currently working on the project which focuses on studying popular free time activities that teenagers in Zetland do. I have found some relevant data on the subject and I am going to use them in my project. 

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According to the information provided in the pie chart, the majority of adolescents, accounting for more than one third, surf the Internet.The next popular activities is playing computer games. The figure is 21%. Surprisingly, just few teenagers do sports. The figure stands at 9%.

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Comparing the data given in the pie chart, it becomes obvious that that almost three times more teenagers surf the Internet than those engaged in sports. Hanging out with friends seems less popular than chatting on social networks. 

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The pie chart clearly illustrates that adolescents mostly spend their pastime on sedentary activities. However, some problems can arise with the insufficient physical activity. One of them is obesity.One of the probable solutions to the problem is organizing free recreation centers for youngsters where they can do sports that appeal to them. другие проблемы >>>>

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Having analyzed the data in the pie chartit can be concluded that sedentary activities are in priority with adolescents. In my opinion, sport plays a notable role in teenagers’ life because exercise involved in most sports improves teenagers' emotional balance, reduces heart disease and diabetes, among other health benefits. All in all, teens should lead a more active life.

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– make an opening statement on the subject of the project work;

1

(вводное предложение)

 

Undoubtedly, leisure time is becoming more and more popular nowadays.

2

(перифраз) 

 

I am currently working on the project which focuses on studying popular free time activities that teenagers in Zetland do. 

3

(разъяснение)

 

I have found some relevant data on the subject and I am going to use them in my project. 

– select and report 2–3 main facts;

1

(1-е предложение - инфо. из таблицы)

 

According to the information provided in the pie chart, the majority of adolescents, accounting for more than one third, surf the Internet.

2

(2-е предложение - инфо. из таблицы)

The next popular activities is playing computer games. 

3

(подтверждение - инфо. из таблицы)

The figure is 21%. 

4

(удивление - самое маленькое значение)

 

Surprisingly, just few teenagers do sports. The figure stands at 9%.

– make 1–2 comparisons where relevant;

1

(вводное предложение + сравнительная конструкция)

 

Comparing the data given in the pie chart, it becomes obvious that that almost three times more teenagers surf the Internet than those engaged in sports. 

2

(второе предложение + сравнительная конструкция)

Hanging out with friends seems less popular than chatting on social networks. 

– outline a problem that can arise due to the leisure activities preferred by senior citizens and suggest a way of solving it;

1

(вводное предложение + обобщение)

 

The pie chart clearly illustrates that adolescents mostly spend their pastime on sedentary activities. 

2

(вводное предложение)

However, some problems can arise with the insufficient physical activity. 

3

(сама проблема)

 

One of them is obesity. 

4

(решение проблемы)

 

One of the probable solutions to the problem is organizing free recreation centers for youngsters where they can do sports that appeal to them.

– conclude by giving your opinion on the role of leisure activities in life of senior citizens.

1

(общая фраза)

 

Having analyzed the data in the pie chartit can be concluded that sedentary activities are in priority with adolescents.

2

 

(дать пояснение почему я так думаю)

 

In my opinion, sport plays a notable role in teenagers’ life because exercise involved in most sports improves teenagers' emotional balance, reduces heart disease and diabetes, among other health benefits. 

3

(обобщение)

 

All in all, teens should lead a more active life.

 


 

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